State your topic argument clearly in the introduction to give the reader immediate direction.
Avoid a "cookbook" style (e.g., "He did A. Then B happened.") by weaving in the character’s thoughts and feelings during the action. Slammed
Use the action of slamming to convey emotion without explicit dialogue. A character slamming a door behind them can replace an unnecessary "he said angrily". State your topic argument clearly in the introduction
Professional fields often require "dispassionate" writing. If a creative writing teacher dislikes your style, it may simply be a mismatch of expectations for your specific field. Slammed
If your writing has been "slammed" by a teacher or peer, it is important to separate the critique from your identity as a writer.